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[September Pilot] Contract 046: Kordath Bleu d’Tana - Recon, B-Class

RowenaMagnuri

Commissioner’s Office, ACB Contract Offices
Sublevels, Arcona Citadel, Estle City, Selen
0730 Hours

The Onderonian frowned as he glanced around at the desolate office. Sight was away with the Journeymen, handling his Clan Rollmaster duties by escorting the lower level Shadesworn to the Shadow Academy on Lyspair.

His Fade was away training Celevon’s daughter Alyssa in the use of slugthrowers at the range in Estle City whilst the Obelisk kept the contracts flowing to members who needed missions.

The computer that uploaded the information to the datapads and holopads activated with a loud hum for several minutes. It suddenly became silent before a side-slot opened and spat out a datapad.

The Assassin read the dossier with furrowed brows, trying to decide who could best handle the mission. It suddenly struck the Onderonian before he pulled out a comlink and attempted to connect the call.

“You’ve reached the loopy Aedile. Pain meds are my friend. Talk and I’ll get back to you once I’ve returned from the land of opiates,” a lightly accented feminine voice came over, clearly a recorded message.

“Atyiru, I’ve found a mission that is perfect for you whilst you recover. Please report to the Contract Offices in the Citadel at your earliest convenience,” the Obelisk explained softly before disconnecting the call.

“You b-busy, Edraven?” the Ryn spoke up from the doorway, which caused the Shadicar to slowly glance upwards.

“Are you here to get arrested by security again? Because it was difficult making sure you avoided a Core-world prison,” Celevon drawled, his eyes narrowed at the Krath.

Kordath visibly gulped, glancing around nervously before shaking his head. “I n-need a job. Umm… Something to keep myself occupied for a few days.”

The Obelisk gave the smallest of nods, quickly searching through the datapads on Sight’s desk. “I’ve got something here for you. Reconnaissance. B-Class.”

Celevon tossed the datapad to the Galerean once the older male glanced curiously at him.

Mission: Recon, B-Class
Target: Ryker Savings & Bonds, Money services
Specifics: Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to perform reconnaissance upon the chosen destination and provide intelligence. This may require you to map the area, up to and including the vault, so pay special attention to as many details as possible.
Suspected Resistance: Medium. So long as you pretend to be opening an account and act nervous/unsure about opening one with their company, you should have little issues.

“I’ll accept this one. Shall I comm you when I have finished?”

The Onderonian gave a miniscule nod in response as he drew a cigarette from the packet on his desk. “Good luck. Try not to get caught, as it will be more difficult to get you released from the local security forces.”

Strestrongarmis

Kordath kept his eyes closed, trying to control his breathing, as the shuttle descended to the surface of Almaran, the ‘Downside’ as the locals referred to it. Reflecting on the need to some day acquire a ship of his own, with no windows and a droid to fly it for him, the Ryn focused on keeping his breakfast internal as the ship shook it’s way through the atmosphere. That or an extended therapy session with someone trustworthy to break him of his fear of space, which was ludicrous, it wasn’t the space travel itself that worried him.

It was the landing, or more likely crashing, or the seals failing on an airlock and sucking everyone out into the cold void of space, or a reactor leak and the slow death of radiation sickness as the ship hung dead….

Shaking his head, the Krath took a deep breath, feeling the ship’s landing gear shift below the deck through his feet. Finally. As the craft settled, he reached for the shoulder bag he’d brought with him, getting up and pushing his way through the dozen or so other passengers trying to disembark. A few grunts and angry remarks followed him, then embarrassed silence as he reached the bottom of the loading ramp, and vacated his last couple of meals onto the tarmac.

With a groan he straightened up, pulling a piece of cloth and a mint from a pocket of his baggy, pocket laden shorts, that had been stowed for just this occasion, the Knight began to feel better. Solid ground had a rejuvenating effect on the Ryn. Taking another deep breath, the tinge of exhaust already blowing away in the temperate winds, Kordath looked around at the blue skies, and the green fields rolling away from the small spaceport.

Adjusting the brim on the wide, floppy tan hat covering his head, pulling a set of sunglasses from the pocket of the vest set over a light tee shirt, he set off. The station was just ahead of him, and over the sound of laborers unloading luggage, he could just hear the lapping of the ocean against the beach.

“Nice place, wonder how fast Celevon wants me to head back after I’m done,” he wondered aloud, wandering towards the small terminal. Pulling from his bag his falsified ID for this mission, somebody at Kurs’kanark had cooked it up for him so he wouldn’t have to ‘create’ a way through customs on this mission, he smiled at the bored looking customs agent.

The woman, a short human, or near human, the Ryn was never certain how to tell the smooth skins apart, held up her palm.

“Name, reason for visit, and identification please,” she droned, and Kordath couldn’t help but wonder why a droid wasn’t doing her job.

“Korrin Cyan, madame, here for business and pleasure, here’s my card,” he said, voice brimming with the false confidence that he’d decided this persona would need, handing the card over with a steady hand. The woman glanced at it, handed it back and waved him through.

“Stay out of trouble, obey the laws, stay out of the south side of town,” she said, another obviously rehearsed line.

“I’m sorry, the south side?”

She glared at him, annoyed at this apparent break in routine, “It’s not nice, tourists should stay away from it, else they don’t come back. You’ve been warned.”

“Ah, yes, thank you miss,” he said with a smile, walking away and past the bag check area, out into the streets of the small tourist town.

Pulling a datapad from his bag, the Ryn brought up his particulars for this little visit. Ryker Savings and Bonds, Money Services and such. Nodding to himself, he spotted the first line of defense of any tourist trap, the information booth, which the Krath approached and picked up a small hardcopy map. He studied it for a moment, noting that it listed of course restaurants, beach spots, entertainment….

“Excuse me,’ he said, turning towards the booth’s occupant, this time a protocol droid that looked as if it’d been left in the sun and salty wind for too long, it’s silvery frame tarnished with rust, ‘I see this map lists many things, but I require directions to Ryker Savings and Bonds, I have to deal with a bit of business before I can get around to enjoying myself, please.”

“Of course sir, allow me to mark it on your map,” replied the droid, awkwardly taking the paper from the Ryn, and jerkily marking a location. Handing it back across the counter, Kordath took hold of it, and had to almost tear it out of the droid’s grip, which seemed to have seized.

“My apologies sir, the management is not overly concerned about maintaining the droids in it’s service these days,” it said, apologetically.

Nodding his thanks, the Krath beat a hasty retreat from the strange droid, referencing the map to find both the bank, and the closest hotel to it. He’d been given a very limited allotment of credits to accomplish this mission, likely due to how he’d botched the last job Celevon had sent him on, so the hotel was likely out of his price range. That was fine, he’d slept in his share of inventive places before, and a beach would be one of the better ones.

Of course, there were ways around a lack of funds, the Ryn thought with a smile, shaking his arms out unconsciously, as if to limber up. Tourists, he thought with a smile, tourists taking pictures, pointing at things, staring at maps, watching birds fly over the water like it was the most novel thing in the world. By the time he’d made it two blocks down the beachfront, the Knight heard the first yell of surprise, and he had enough credits in pocket to spend a couple nights in relative luxury.

The yells were getting louder, he noticed, as he turned a corner at random, walking steadily down the street till he reached a small restaurant, one of the typical tourist places that would be incredibly over priced and filled with bad souvenirs. Twenty minutes and two cafs later, he walked out with a bundle of postcards, the usual “Wish you were here!’ and ‘Come to Sunny Almaran!’ under his arm. Whistling to himself he rounded another corner and spotted a hotel, referencing the scratch mark the droid had put on his map, Bleu noted he was maybe a block away from the bank.

Wandering inside with a big, open smile, he walked up to the front desk, slapped down a hundred ill-gained credits, and asked for a room. Despite the protestations of the clerk, credits lead the way with the manager, and Kordath found himself settling in a small, but nice room on the backside of the hotel. Over a few rooftops he could see the bank, and the sun coming down. The Ryn set his bag down, tossing the postcards into a trash bin, and proceeded to unpack what he had.

The identification card came out first, followed by the datapad, placed carefully on the nightstand. That was likely the most important thing in his inventory. Next came a tightly folded beige jumpsuit and a full face breather mask, with a hose coming off it, and a tank with ‘methane’ stenciled along the side. A small holo cam was produced, the map of the town, and the remaining credits, some two hundred in total. Nodding to himself, Kordath placed the jumpsuit, mask, and tank on top of the dresser, put the ID card with the datapad, and left the room to scout.

Ten minutes of walking around the block gave him a few exits from the hotel, including a fire escape that started a floor above his own, that the Krath was pretty certain he could make his way up. The building next store was a little lower than the hotel, the drop would be painful if he didn’t use the Force to buffer his fall, but it was an option. Then it was just a matter of getting down to the street again. Content with this, Kordath returned to his room to rest up for the evening, and prepare himself for the bank in the morning.

Strestrongarmis

Morning light shown through the window as Kordath awoke, stretching his lanky body out and enjoying the feeling of a good nights sleep. With a yawn, he checked the chrono, it was still quite early, despite this he got dressed and prepared to go out. Data pad in hand, glasses on and hat on his head, the Ryn made his way out the lobby and down the street, noting that the bank wouldn’t open for another two hours. Directly across the way was a tapcaf, doors open and lights on already, waiting for the daily influx of caf drinkers and pastry consumers.

Outside were several tables, umbrellas not yet up as the sun was still quite low in the sky. Kordath got himself a caf and ordered a small breakfast, sitting outside and soaking up the morning atmosphere. This allowed him to observe as a pudgy human, already sweating despite the relatively cool morning, came down the sidewalk to the bank. What followed was a routine that the Krath could spot right off, the ‘what did I do with those damned keys oh there they are of course it’s the last pocket I check’.

Kordath marked him down in his datapad, inputting the time and a note stating ‘Bank Manager’. The next hour passed with various new arrivals, before the grand doors on the front of the bank were opened up. He’d logged within the datapad every employee he could spot coming in, though there was likely a tradesman entrance at the back that some used. The Ryn would deal with that when he had too, watching for another half hour and sipping another cup of caf, before standing up and straightening his clothing. Time to get to work.

Referencing his pad as he walked in, he knew there were at least two security guards within the building, half a dozen of what appeared to be clerks and several men who’d shown up in well tailored suits. Loan officers, and the like, he figured, men who made it their business to somehow end up with more money then they started with, by giving money to strangers. Banking was a level of theft that Kordath had never tried to involve himself in, the rules got strange and the more you made the more likely something horribly wrong would occur.

Through the big double doors he walked, getting a courtesy once over by the security guard standing just inside, still holding a cup of what passed for coffee or caf provided by the bank. Despite the man’s only passing glance, Kordath was intrigued, he was used to more scrutiny than this when entering any official institution, being Ryn was a good way to get watched by security. Either the guard didn’t know his species, or the tourist world saw more of his kind then Kordath cared to think about. Running into family would complicate matters immensely, and make things much more….difficult.

An internal shrug and a mental shake to get back into gear, Kordath prepared himself to be Korrin Cyan, entrepreneur and former gambler. Setting a big smile upon his face, the Ryn pulled his shades off, folding them and hanging them off his vest, and looked around the large room that dominated most of the banks visible two floors. A few offices lined one wall, set opposite to the long counter that held the clerks from before, tellers then, he noted. The quick sweep also took in the holo cams set in the ceiling and walls, the motion trackers near the doors, and that the windows themselves appeared to have no latches.

Nodding to himself, he approached the counter, eyes roving across the second floor as he could see it. Big corner office, overlooking the street outside and the floor within, likely the bank managers, several other offices, likely accountants that had no interaction with customers. A heavily secure looking door at the bank of the room, with a keypad and retinal scanner, probably lead to the vault and safety deposit area. He’d have to get back there somehow, and now was as good of time to start as any.

A woman behind the counter looked up as the grinning Ryn stepped up, placing a hand on the counter and using the other to sweep his hat off and tip forward in a slight bow.

“Excuse me, madame, but I’m in need of opening an account, whom might I speak about this with?” he spoke, still smiling.

“Umm,’ replied the woman, not expecting so much enthusiasm this early in her day, especially about banking, before raising a hand and waving at someone behind Kordath.

“Can I help you, sir?” spoke a voice thick with condescending undertones, the kind of voice you hear from a man whose far too serious about everything. As Kordath turned he almost lost his nerve, the speaker coming into view was one of the last things he’d expected.

The Ryn started at the feet, normal shake, he noted absently, shiny black shoes, very well made. Pleated black trousers, pressed to the point he could likely cut someone with the seam, black jacket over white shirt, deep crimson tie and then….

And then Kordath couldn’t help but stare for a moment, completely out sorts. A word was on the periphery of his mind, trying to break through, as he watched the light glint off of the quartet of horns, extending a good six inches over the bald, burnt orange scalp. Deep set red eyes peered at him from beneath a heavy brow, the entire face gave the impression of skin stretched taut across a skull. Curved, pointed ears laid against the bare head, long lengths of straight black hair reaching down to his shoulders, starting from right behind the ears.

Kordath was almost certain that his mother had told him stories about a being like this when he refused to sleep as a child, but finally the word ‘Elomin’ came through. Gathering his wits, best as he could, the Ryn smiled again and stuck a hand out.

“Sorry mate, you startled me a bit, names Korrin sir, looking to open an account,” he said hurriedly, trying to fill the void of unspoken awkwardness.

“I…see, you may call me Brescia, I take it you are not a resident of Almaran? No, I didn’t believe so, we do not get many of your….kind, here,” spoke Elomin, slowly and accentuating every word.

‘My kind? Not exactly a new one,’ thought the Ryn, “No sir, but I heard good things and I’ll be working out of this area for a good long while, ya’see? It’s a nice world you lot got here, very pleasant, heard good things about you lot here as well, from people I’ve met who appreciate…discretion.’

Korrin threw in a wink at the end of this, just because it felt in character. A cocked, heavy brow was the reply from the Elomin as he lead his prospective customer to one of the small offices lining the wall.

“I see, Mister….?”

“Korrin, sir, Korrin Cyan, but you can call me Korrin mate,” said the Ryn, smiling still, sitting back in a plush chair before the desk, ‘This dewback? Feels rather nice it does.”

The Elomin was taking a moment to visibly calm himself, it looked to Korrin, “Well then, Mister Cyan-” “Korrin, mate, no need to stand on ceremony if we’re gonna be doing a lot of business together, eh?” “…as I was saying, Mister Cyan, while we at Ryker Savings and Bonds do hold our client’s privacy in the utmost regard, we do not deal in….illegal matters, you understand?”

Korrin looked confused, “Illegal, mate? Don’t know why a bit of digging would be illegal, always file for the proper permits, keeps it clean it does. We’re all slaves to bureaucracy in the end, eh?”

“Digging, sir?” responded Brescia, his tone slathered with condescension.

“Yessir, digging, archaeological and such, digging up what’s been lost in all the wars, or if we’re real lucky, stuff from way before then.”

“Sir, what you are suggesting sounds like looting, and our bank does not condone such actions.”

“Looting?” replied the Ryn, looking hurt, “I go through the proper cultural and politicos, mate, anything found gets reported to local governments in case it’s got ‘cultural bloody significance’. Sometimes you find stuff people had to leave because of the, wossernames, the Vong, or the Imps. Sometimes you find stuff from people was dead long time ago, that stuff we sell to the museums in the Core worlds, good money there, not to mention good for the reputation, eh?”

“So I am clear, Mister Cyan, you do all of this within legal bounds?”

“Course I do mate! If I didn’t, I wouldn’t be talking to you, now would I?”

“Pardon?”

Korrin let out the exasperated sigh of a professional explaining to a laymen, “Look, not everybody in my line of work has got them…them…ethics, yeah. Some think, ‘I slip in to them old ruins, take the shiny bits, and go sell them to the bloke in the towers on Coruscant who like these things.’ That’s illegal, mate, what I do is make sure things either go to who lost ‘em, for a finders fee of course, digging ain’t cheap and it ain’t always safe, or to the museums. That’s what I need a good bank in the area I can trust, eh?”

“I do apologize, sir, but I still do not understand your need for a bank,” replied the increasingly annoyed Brescia, “Unless you are looking for a loan.”

‘And your tone in that question answers whether I’d get one, my fake identification is good, but it ain’t that good today,’ thought the Ryn.

“Deposit boxes, Mister Brescia, deposit boxes! Them unethical types have a habit of ‘finding’ stuff other diggers, legitimate diggers, Mister Brescia! They ‘find’ thems, and they takes ‘em, and it’s a blasted sin that it’s allowed. I’ve worked for some big time archaeologist types mate, won’t bore you with names it’s a pretty closed field really, and security, trusted security, that’s always been a big one they advo—advo…says is important, eh?”

“You require a bank that you can store found items at?” queried the Elomin, seeming more comfortable as his grasp of the situation improved.

“Now you got it mate! And this is a good planet, sunny skies, pretty sights, nice beaches, great place to entertain and negotiate with them big names from the museums, see? Good business, that is,” said the Ryn, smiling even more broadly now.

“I see, you seem very focused on the business aspect of this, yet you are not here for a loan?” asked Brescia, the first signs of curiosity showing through the condescension and annoyance.

“Oh no sir, had a good bit of luck on one of the swoop tracks on my transit from the inner-rim I did, twenty bloody five to one, me gambling days are done, but I’m well set up for going out on me own diggings,” said Korrin, propping his feet up on the Elomin’s desk.

“Ahem,” spoke Brescia, turning his unsettling crimson gaze on the boots, Korrin removed them, looking sheepish for just a moment, “I see, so you’d like to rent a security deposit box for items found?”

“Well that’s the rub, ain’t it mate? Never know what you’ll find when you’re digging, could be small stuff, could be big stuff, ya never really can know. So I was figuring on a…what’s ya call it, retainer? Yeah, retainer account, I show up or ship stuff to the bank, you lot hold on to it, charge me for the space, huh? And a monthly charge, course, for even having the account, good business that is, eh?”

“I see, so you have nothing you want to deposit now, but you would like to be able to store things in the future as you….acquire them?”

“Find them, dig ‘em up, acquire makes me sound like one of them black market types mate, that’s just insulting.”

“I believe I understand, we will have to draw up the necessary contracts and the like of course, but I believe this is a possibility.”

“Great, show me the vault then eh?”

Brescia seemed taken aback for a moment, “I’m sorry?”

“Like I said, sometimes you find big things, I find a sized statue of some ancient big Lord whatevers, it ain’t gonna fit in a wee security box, is it?”

“I…suppose a tour of the security deposit area and vault would not be out of the question, in this case, Mister Cyan, please, follow me.”

The Elomin almost looked confused, and inside the constructed persona, Kordath was almost laughing, talk fast and keep going was a good way to deal with the strict mindset of the species.

Head on a swivel, Kordath checked for any cameras he missed as the perspective of the room changed, reaching the heavy security door in the back. Paying careful attention out of the corner his eye, the Ryn watched Brescia unlock it, knowing that the code probably changed on a regular basis but still, knowledge was power. The door opened without a sound, a testament to the maintenance schedule the bank followed, and a gleaming corridor was beyond it.

A security check point, right before a turn in the hall, showed the location of the second guard finally. Kordath made a mental note that there was likely a main security room as well, though likely it was the size of a broom closet, with another guard watching the cameras. Brescia nodded to the guard, exchanging a few hushed words, before ushering ‘Korrin’ through. Around the corner, they came to a trio of doors, one in each wall.

Gesturing to the left, Brescia spoke, “As you can see, this is the security deposit room, boxes of various sizes and such, for small items and up to the chambers that are exactly one foot by four feet long. To the right, our data center, holding account information and any valuable information our clients would like to be held in a…discrete manner.”

Kordath whistled lowly, glancing through the clear security door to the datacenter, noting the name on the server, ‘Fenomax Systems 90,000’. Sounded fancy, and very specific. Good, he thought with a smile.

“And of course, through the door before us,” spoke Brescia nodding towards the heavy, multi-locked door before them, “Is the vault, one moment while I open it.”

The sound of shuffling behind Kordath confirmed what his other senses had already told him, the security guard was not at his station. Brescia wasn’t dumb, that was obvious, the guard was ready for trouble, which was fine, the Ryn wasn’t planning on doing anything stupid. The door opened, and the two men walked in. Kordath was suitably impressed, but also a bit disappointed.

Brescia seemed to notice the expression, and for the first time cracked a slight grin, “Most people have the same misconception, Mister Cyan, that we keep pallets of credits out in the open, remember that most notes are digital these days. I blame the holo-film industry.”

Korrin nodded, smiling and laughing for a moment, “Yeah, I admit, not what I expected mate, but still, you got good security, and a good vault….oh blast is that the time? Look, you get all that paperwork ready, I’ll be back tomorrow morning eh? Get an early start, I’m sure theres a lot, as I said, slaves to bureaucracy.”

“Indeed, Mister Cyan, but without bureaucracy, we would be as beasts,” replied Brescia, and Kordath had a very difficult time hiding his horror when the realization dawned, ‘He really believes this, my gods.’

Brescia escorted him out the front door, with somewhat more courtesy than he’d started with, and Kordath quickly walked back to his hotel. Making straight to the refresher station, he threw up and took a shower, feeling all the repressed anxiety flood back as he sat in the shower for ten minutes, trying to control his breathing.

A few minutes later, dry and clean, the Ryn dressed in the jumpsuit, pulling the breather mask that obscured his features on, and hooked up the empty tank labeled methane. Limbering up, he opened the window, and made a Force assisted jump up to the fire escape above, and headed to the roof to wait for nightfall.

Strestrongarmis

As the sun sunk on Almaran, hues of orange and pink lighting the horizon, Kordath sat near the corner of the hotel rooftop. Datapad in his lap, he marked off each person leaving the bank, the pudgy manager leaving last and setting the security system. No night guards, but this was in the tourist part of town, so security officers seemed to be on every other corner anyways. Stars were already appearing on the opposing horizon, and the clear sky made the beaches very nearly ethereal in appearance.

Soaking up the atmosphere for a moment, Kordath sighed, knowing he still had work to do, and climbed to his feet. After securing the datapad within his jumpsuit, the Ryn took a few deep breathes, centering his mind, before sprinting the length of the roof and jumping towards the next building. Over the alley, he began to tuck his body and throw his weight forward, while allowing the Force to slow the descent. Rolling to his feet on the next rooftop, he smiled, pleased with the lack of noise he’d made, and the lack of injury.

A few more roof hops and a ladder later, he was on the streets, two blocks from his hotel, and heading south. The further away from the tourist trade and storefronts, the darker the town became. First boarded up windows and dark glowbulbs in the street lamps, then the occasional refuse barrel on fire, shadowy figures near them. Finally after an hour of walking, the Krath started seeing what he’d been hoping for, and heard what he’d been straining to notice for a while.

The scuff of footsteps behind him had been growing steadily for several minutes, as well as the occasional murmur. Kordath heard the patter of running feet off to his left, down an alleyway, and listened to them echo into the distance. Under his mask he sighed, this part was necessary, the Ryn knew, but it didn’t mean he’d enjoy it. Slowing his pace and shifting his body to loosen his muscles up, Kordath felt the Force seep into him, enhancing his senses. Just ahead at the corner, he could see movements in the shadows, a trio of young humans very nearly glowing to his assisted sight.

Kordath sighed again, clenching his hands a few times as the figures ahead hunched themselves further into the shadows. At least one looked to have a stick, possibly a broken off post or pipe, in hand, and the glint of metal shone from another. The Ryn stopped, still several feet from the corner, and could feel the confusion playing out before and behind him. If he tried, ever so slightly, he could pick up the trace thoughts.

‘…stopped for? Bleeding come on you…’

‘-money, better have somethin’ on ‘im, last one…’

‘…wonder what color this one bleeds, heh…heh….’

“I don’t suppose we can skip this part, hmm?” asked the Ryn, his voice distorted by the breather apparatus on his mask, ‘I’m looking for someone with…skills, of a sort, you lot probably can find them for me.”

A short laugh came from behind, “Friend, all your going to find here is a beating if you drop all the creds now, otherwise we’ll just take ‘em off ya when we’re done.”

“I thought as much, I do apologize for this, but I did ask nicely first,” spoke the Knight, spreading his feet out and bending his knees slightly.

The one with the pipe came first, yelling loudly and raising it over his head, intent to end things quickly with a blow to the head. Kordath shifted, letting the weapon pass by and bringing his knee up into the man’s stomach, before grasping him by the back of his neck and flipping him over. The pipe rolled away with a clatter, the man gasping for breath on the ground, before one of his friends came up from behind and tried to grab the Ryn.

Kordath felt the man’s intent well before the attacker knew what he was doing, the Krath ducked, whipping his elbow back to catch the man in the groin. Another hit the ground, the two in front were circling warily, and the Knight could sense behind him one other still. A few years ago on Nar Shaddaa, when the Ryn was first learning the steps of Jeswandi, this fight would have been exhilarating, a challenge, something to aspire towards.

With the Force flowing through him, every breath feeling charged and every one of his opponent’s moves seemingly slowed to a crawl, it was trivial. Nearly pointless, the Krath felt he could crush the life from these five fools who’d chosen to attack him in the darkness of the slums….

Kordath shook himself, he’d felt the allure of walking further down the paths of Darkness a few times, but his observations suggested that way lay madness and never ending cravings for power. Honestly it seemed like a lot of work, to the Ryn, who noted absently that the final would be mugger was on his knees in front of the Krath, begging incoherently as Kordath bent the man’s wrist backwards.

“Ah, yes, I’m looking for someone…,’ started the Ryn.

“Anybody! Tell you anything! Know where the droid resistance guys are! Anything! Just don’t break my fracking wrist man, please,” begged the man.

“Droid resistance? What? Why do you think…whatever, I need a slicer, a good slicer, this is a tourist trap of a bloody world, that means somebody here is good at sniffing data,” growled the Ryn, putting a bit more pressure on the man’s hand.

“AAAAAAH—I-I-I know a guy, yeah, up the road, name of Trancer, red apartment building, third floor up, oh gods let me go please let me go please please.”

Kordath released the hand, watching the man drop to the ground sobbing. Pulling a few credits from his pocket, he tossed them at the man, who looked confused.

“I tried to ask nicely. Thank you for your…cooperation in this matter, have a nice day,” said the Krath, turning and walking away.

Ten minutes later and three floors up, Kordath was grumbling to himself about not getting an apartment number from the hooligan. Reaching out with his mind, he felt the occupants of the floor, some felt nearly feral, possibly rodents living in the walls, but a bright spot stood out, full of caf and pent up energy. The Krath homed in on it, coming across a surprisingly clean looking door compared to most he passed, and a ‘no solicitors’ sign pasted on it.

Knocking, he heard a curse from within, and the sound of….cans getting knocked over? Several moments passed before he could hear several locks shifting on the door, and it opened a crack, revealing a single bloodshot eye.

“Who, what, what do you want?” asked someone on the other side.

Kordath held up several credits in one hand, making sure the singular eye could see them, ‘You Trancer? Need to hire your…’services’, hear you’re pretty good at what you do.”

The door opened a bit more, revealing a short, disheveled Bothan, licking his lips and glancing first at the credits, then the breather mask covering Kordath’s face, and back to the credits.

“Y…yeah, I’m Trancer, ummm, you should come inside before somebody see’s you flashing that kinda dross around,” he said hurriedly, voice squeaking a bit as he ushered the Ryn in through the door.

Trancer turned to peer at Kordath with his bloodshot eyes again, his nearly orange hair flowing nervously as he tried to peer through the obscuring mask, “What, uhh, what can I, uhh, what do you need?”

‘My gods this thing is even more ill suited for socialization then I am,’ thought the Ryn, feeling slightly superior for probably the first time in his life, “How do you feel about getting into a bank’s database, and copying the whole thing, hmm?”

“Oh, that’s not hard, takes a little while so I don’t get caught, but pretty easy, easier if it’s local of course,” replied the Bothan promptly, pride shining in his beady little eyes. Talking about what he was capable of seemed to give Trancer more confidence, and he was already moving to the most complicated looking desk Kordath had ever seen.

“So, any bank in particular, or you just want me to start pulling financial info off the holo net? That’s easy too, I mean you can pick up stock numbers from Coruscant before they reach the Outer Rim and make a killing on mineral stocks, course then you gotta have a whole set up for claiming the creds, cleaning the creds, all sorts of…I’m rambling, aren’t I?” said the Bothan, finishing lamely as his enthusiasm petered out.

Kordath patted the short Bothan on the shoulder, awkwardly unsure how to deal with this, “…no? A bit, it’s okay friend, but no, we don’t need to get that complicated today. Ryker savings, just in town, can you do that for me?”

“Ah, yeah, sure, well probably,” said the Bothan, licking his lips nervously once more, and reaching for a small can with colorful graphics on the outside, downing whatever was in it in one swift pull, “Know what kind of system they have?” he asked, followed by a belch that reeked of…of….Kordath couldn’t place the smell, even through the breather unit, but fish that had been left in the desert sun for a week came to mind.

‘Never even been to the desert,’ thought Kordath, briefly, “The system? Oh, yes, a…Fenmax?”

“Fenomax?” suggested Trancer.

“Ah, yes, a Fenomax 90,000, that’s it.”

“Oh sure, that’s easy! I can do that, only take a few hours.”

Kordath felt cold suddenly, eyes roving over the small apartment, the apparent mountains of cans and take out food containers. Something was moving in one corner, under a pile of old, condiment smeared wrappers. The small kitchen through the door beyond didn’t look very promising either, piles of bowls and caf stained mugs filling the sink.

“A few…hours?” asked the Ryn, weakly.

Trancer nodded, already typing away and staring, with unblinking intensity at the holo screen before him, ‘Want me to ghost the whole server? Then yeah, it’ll get all the financial data, all the incoming and outgoing from the last few days, maybe week, all that stuff, takes time, where do you want it put?”

Kordath pulled the datapad from his jumpsuit, and handed it over, giving the cluttered desk a once over.

“You can upload it all onto here, don’t worry, it’s got the space for it….what’s this do?” asked the Ryn, reaching towards a large red button on a slightly raised bit of desk, devoid of garbage or decoration compared to the rest of the desk.

“DON’T TOUCH THAT!” shouted the Bothan, gasping for air for a few seconds, nearly having had a panic attack it looked like, “that’s my kill switch, case security shows up.”

“Kill switch? What does it do?” asked the Krath, knowing fully well from his days running around on Nar Shaddaa that every paranoid slicer had one of these.

Trancer was shaking a little, though whether from adrenaline or whatever it was he’d been drinking, the Knight couldn’t tell, “It wipes my computer, completely destroys the data, might even set the thing on fire, just…don’t…touch…it…”

“Fine, sorry, right, well then get to work, I’ll just…wait…ummm,” Kordath looked around the cramped space again.

Gesturing vaguely towards the kitchen, eyes never straying from his screen, Trancer spoke, “There’s a fire escape through the kitchen, it’s clear out there, I don’t like going out there much.”

‘You don’t say?’ thought the Ryn, navigating through the garbage and towers of dirty laundry to the kitchen, and crawling through the window into the night air.

A few deep breathes and he felt more at ease, though the jumpsuit would have to be burned when he was done here. The entire apartment deserved a good cleansing, the Ryn felt, as he settled on the fire escape, adjusting his breathing to enter a meditative trance.

“Alright, jobs done friend, that’s gonna be hard currency, or you want to send it to one of my accounts?” said a voice through the window, breaking Kordath’s foray into mindless serenity.

Shaking himself, Kordath stood, looking at the approaching sunlight on the horizon, and grimaced, it’d be full daylight by the time he got back to the hotel. That meant going back in the way he got out, so as not to arouse suspicion. Going back through the window, he found Trancer, so full of energy and anxiety that he was very nearly hopping from foot to foot, the first time Kordath had ever seen someone actually do this. He was clutching the Ryn’s datapad, and his eyes were darting about anxiously.

“Problem, Trancer?”

“No, no problem, just don’t like staying in one spot after doing something that intrusive, ya know, locally, gonna have to start packing my stuff and find new digs. Security, ya know?”

“I see, give me the pad, please, and I’ll get the transfer set up, how much did this little task cost me?” asked the Ryn, trying to sound pleasant. He had a creeping feeling up his spine that he knew would lead to something…distasteful. Sometimes having honed his precognitive skills bit him in the tail, the Krath felt, already dreading the next ten minutes. It wasn’t that he knew what was about to happen, he didn’t, but the feeling wasn’t good, as he took the datapad out of the Bothan’s hands.

“I take it you have a holo uplink here that I can use?”

“Course, password is T5ANC35, and this was easily a two thousand credit job,” said the slicer, anxiety pouring off him in waves through the Force.

“I see, very good, let me just set it up….give me a moment, if you would? I’ll stay here in the kitchen, that way you know I won’t be running off on you, thank you.”

As Trancer left the filthy kitchen, Kordath got the pad onto the holo, using an innocent looking application to let the automated process run to get a signal back home. After about a minute of gibberish scrawling across the screen, a prompt came up, and Kordath felt his lip curl a bit in distaste as he inputted his password for the system.

‘B-L-E-U-I-T’, the Ryn glared at the screen, not appreciating Edraven’s sense of humor concerning his track record, it was just one job….

A small ding was heard as the system connected, and a text box appeared and a message above it. Connection Secured was scrawled across the top of the screen.

‘Tell me you’re not on the run, tell me you succeeded,’ read the short message.

Kordath growled as he typed.

‘negative on law, mission going well, have map, particulars, copy of bank’s server data’

It seemed as if far to long passed after this message before he received a reply, and the Ryn was getting nervous.

‘Confirm last, copy of bank’s server?’

‘Confirmed.’

‘How? Your profile doesn’t suggest such skills’

‘Sub-contracted.’

‘…operational security is in effect then, Bleu, no loose ends.’

Kordath stood in silence for a moment, realizing what the creeping feeling of dread had been, and looked around the kitchen with an unfocused stare.

‘Confirm, Bleu? No. Loose. Ends.’

‘…confirm. On my way home by mid day.’

‘Copy.’

Closing the connection, the Krath stuck the pad into his jumpsuit, and looked around the kitchen one more time, spotting something in the mass of dirty dishes.

Trancer glanced up as Kordath walked out of the kitchen, ‘Hey, man, that was a fun bit of work, soon as your cred transfer goes through though I’m gonna have to ask you to leave so I can pack. Like I said, ya know…”

The Bothan stopped abruptly, a look of surprise on his face, as Kordath’s left hand rested on his shoulder, the Ryn’s right hand driving the chef knife he’d found buried in the kitchen sink through the slicer’s back. Twisting it, remembering his species anatomy studies, the Ryn shoved the blade towards the Bothan’s heart.

“I know, security,” whispered Kordath into the slicer’s ear, moving his hand from shoulder to the Bothan’s mouth, ‘Shh, time to rest now, Trance, time to rest, shhh.”

When the body quit twitching, Kordath shoved a pile of dirty laundry on top of the desk, and hit the killswitch. As the computer began to smoke, and then the clothing began to smolder, he left. Running back towards the tourist part of town, the Ryn had to stop in an alleyway to find a dumpster to throw up behind. It’d been for the Clan, blast it, it’d been for the Clan so he’d done what he had to do.

By mid-day he was slumped in the crash seat of a shuttle, leaving Almaran, too tired and numb to worry too much about his space anxiety.

It was such a shame, he felt, the Bothan had been an okay guy.

RowenaMagnuri

Grade: Excellent - 3 Points


All in all, not a bad contract. I particularly liked the creativity and detail you put into this contract. However, the lack of proofreading was apparent from the start. It was these errors that kept you from gaining the highest score possible. There were several things I didn’t bother marking, such as accidental use of single quotes with the dialogue ending with dual quotes (‘ vs “). Whilst the general errors in this post would have earned you a score of Satisfactory, your use of planning in detail in the contract itself bumped the score up to the next level.

I’m looking forward to seeing how improve in your future fictional tasks. Well done, Kord.

“Nice place, wonder how fast Celevon wants me to head back after I’m done,” he wondered aloud, wandering towards the small terminal. Pulling from his bag his falsified ID for this mission, somebody at Kurs’kanark had cooked it up for him so he wouldn’t have to ‘create’ a way through customs on this mission, he smiled at the bored looking customs agent.

This is… very poorly phrased. In all honestly, this reminds me of someone who speaks English as a second language and tried using Google Translate to cheat through a test. This happens several times throughout your contract/posts.

The woman, a short human, or near human, the Ryn was never certain how to tell the smooth skins apart, held up her palm.

In the Star Wars Universe, Human is capitalized.

“Excuse me,’ he said, turning towards the booth’s occupant, this time a protocol droid that looked as if it’d been left in the sun and salty wind for too long, it’s silvery frame tarnished with rust, ‘I see this map lists many things, but I require directions to Ryker Savings and Bonds, I have to deal with a bit of business before I can get around to enjoying myself, please.”

Realism error. Try using chrome instead. Silver doesn’t rust; it just tarnishes and goes black.

“My apologies sir, the management is not overly concerned about maintaining the droids in it’s service these days,” it said, apologetically.

When using ‘its/it’s’, I’ve found it helps to read aloud and say ‘it is/it was/etc’ to see if it makes sense. If not, use the version without the apostrophe. In this case, it would be:

-maintaining the droids in its service-

The yells were getting louder, he noticed, as he turned a corner at random, walking steadily down the street till he reached a small restaurant, one of the typical tourist places that would be incredibly over priced and filled with bad souvenirs.

Use ‘until’. Slang works best in dialogue and there would be an apostrophe. For example: ’til

Ten minutes of walking around the block gave him a few exits from the hotel, including a fire escape that started a floor above his own, that the Krath was pretty certain he could make his way up. The building next store was a little lower than the hotel, the drop would be painful if he didn’t use the Force to buffer his fall, but it was an option. Then it was just a matter of getting down to the street again. Content with this, Kordath returned to his room to rest up for the evening, and prepare himself for the bank in the morning.

This is not an error, so nothing will be marked down. I merely would like to compliment you on maintaining creativity. A lot of people don’t write out these details where their characters have planned their escapes ahead of time… and seem to think that jumping from a third floor balcony without the aid of the Force would be something they can immediately bounce back from and continue on. Kudos.

Morning light shown through the window as Kordath awoke, stretching his lanky body out and enjoying the feeling of a good nights sleep. With a yawn, he checked the chrono, it was still quite early, despite this he got dressed and prepared to go out. Data pad in hand, glasses on and hat on his head, the Ryn made his way out the lobby and down the street, noting that the bank wouldn’t open for another two hours. Directly across the way was a tapcaf, doors open and lights on already, waiting for the daily influx of caf drinkers and pastry consumers.

*woke

Try using colons and semi-colons rather than just a load of commas. Or even separate some of these thoughts into their own sentences. Datapad is also one word, for future reference.

Big corner office, overlooking the street outside and the floor within, likely the bank managers, several other offices, likely accountants that had no interaction with customers. A heavily secure looking door at the bank of the room, with a keypad and retinal scanner, probably lead to the vault and safety deposit area.

The reference to the manager’s office would have the apostrophe, otherwise you make the reader think there is more than one manager. Secondly, it is spelled ‘led’ when referring to something ‘leading to’ somewhere. :slight_smile:

“Looting?” replied the Ryn, looking hurt, “I go through the proper cultural and politicos, mate, anything found gets reported to local governments in case it’s got ‘cultural bloody significance’. Sometimes you find stuff people had to leave because of the, wossernames, the Vong, or the Imps. Sometimes you find stuff from people was dead long time ago, that stuff we sell to the museums in the Core worlds, good money there, not to mention good for the reputation, eh?”

I love this reference. A lot of people don’t realize that archaeologists and such do this within legal boundaries… but there is a reason the less-polite refer to them as ‘grave-robbers’